You're supposed to learn from your mistakes, right? I should've learned after reading the script to Remember Me. I was shocked by the ending and immediately regretted that I caved into curiosity. When I got my hands on the script for Eclipse, I wish dejavu had kicked my ass and sent my index finger directly to the delete key before I spoiled my favorite of the Twilight saga.
I read Eclipse twice.
How could reading the script kill the movie experience for me?
I wasn't thinking.
Fucking curiosity killed me again.
(For anyone that made a vow to stay Eclipse free....STOP. Don't read any further, just click your way down to Rob candy and check out a video)
Reading the script re-affirmed my lack of confidence in Melissa Rosenberg scripting Breaking Dawn. Although Eclipse pails in comparison to Breaking Dawn's complex mess, Melissa still falls short on substance in key dialogue scenes...
including my favorite...
including my favorite...
(i.e.) The Jacob kiss after the tent.
Bella chases after Jacob to prevent him from joining the Newborn fight. Out of desperation to stop himshe yells out, "Kiss me!"
He doesn't hesitate, she surrenders to it.
(script: Push in close on her face as a wave of repressed feelings rises up, flooding her mind. As they are kissing a series of fast dissolves, one into another as years pass...)
~Bella and Jacob, arm in arm, sitting on a stoop in the bright sunlight.
~Now they're in their late 20's rocking an infant
~In their 30's there are 2 kids now, toddler boy. Infant girl.
~In their 40's the GROWN children home for the holidays
~In their 60's, playing with their grandchildren
...she abruptly snaps out of it.
WHAT. THE. FUCK?
Did I really need to know that while she's kissing Jacob, it's her life with HIM, that's playing out in her head? That this will be played out on the big screen? Betrayal of IMAX proportions?
And the dialogue with Edward after that kiss? Ms. Rosenberg's sophisticated writing talent goes as follows;
Bella, "Edward"
He appears from around the rock, comes toward her. She sees his face, stops. Knows.
Bella, "you saw?"
Edward, "No, but Jacobs thoughts are very loud"
Bella, "I don't know what happened"
Edward, "You love him"
Bella, "I love you more"
I love you more? I LOVE YOU MORE? Is that fucking it?
After those one liners Edward goes on to say it was his fault asking her to choose, his fault for leaving her for Jacob to mend her.
Bella, "Don't blame yourself"
Edward, "I just want you to be happy no matter" ---
then it cuts to Edward saying, "It's begun"
Ms Rosenberg couldn't even let Edward finish his fucking sentence?
THAT'S IT?
Is that the best Ms. Rosenberg could come up with?
After immediately reading that scene, I had a flash back to New Moon and Melissa's brilliant writing after Bella talks to Jacob for the first time after his phasing...
Bella, "So you're a werewolf"
Jacob, "Yeah, since the last time I checked"
Brilliant.
Brilliant.
In the book, the character of Riley and the Newborn army was a background shadow to the story, to the LOVE story that Stephanie gave her readers. Unfortunately, that is not the case for the movie.
Case in point...
Riley.
His character plays a significant part throughout the script. The opening scene starts with him, as a college student, being stalked and eventually bitten by Victoria. The scene cuts to Charlie, the police station, and Riley's parents filing a missing persons report.
He goes onto biting and recruiting newborns. Taking those newborns to bite and recruit more newborns. Riley and Victoria frolicking. Riley, in Bella's bedroom stealing her red sweater. Riley taking the sweater to other newborns to catch a sniff. Riley and newborns traveling to the spot of Bella's (planned scent) in the woods. Riley joining Victoria to Kill Edward and Bella.
Which leads to the fight between Edward, Riley and Victoria.
Edward tries to bargain with Riley by diss'n Victoria. Doesn't work.
Script:
"Bella's POV on Edward: Riley tackles him to his knees, Victoria grabs Edward from behind.
Time freezes-- slow motion as Bella's eyes meet Edwards.
Close on Bella's face--see her clarity, she's never in her life been more sure of what she wants than in this moment. With purpose she grabs up a sharp piece of slate. Bella plunges the shard downward, stabbing her arm. Blood flows dripping bright red onto the white snow. Riley spins toward Bella, the scent making him wild. Victoria catches her scent long enough for Edward to seize the moment. Edward rips Riley's arm off and tosses him to Seth to finish off...."
In a nutshell, Edward rips Victoria's head off with is mouth (true Violent David Slade style I would imagine)...
Script:
"Edward looks up at Bella. Their eyes meet. But shame, fear, cloud his face. She moves toward him. Slowly. As she reaches him, he turns away.
Bella, "Edward"
Edward, "I didn't want you to see that".
Brilliant writing there, Rosenberg (eyeroll)
Much to my dismay, Rosenberg included that creepy imprinting crap into the script. Jacob fills Bella in on the Sam, Leah and Emily love triange, In which Bella herself, says is "creepy". (set up Jacob and Renessme')
Also set up in Eclipse for Breaking Dawn are 2 scenes in which both Charlie and Renee talk to Bella about having children. With Charlie it was incorporated in the scene when she talks to him about his feelings about Marriage and in a scene with Renee when Bella goes to visit her in Florida. Renee gives her a quilt made of T-shirts of different places they went to. With Renee saying to Bella that she can do the same with her "Children".
Eclipse was my favorite of the three books.
My only wish was that Catherine Hardwick was the one to direct it. She captured Stephanie Meyers vision of Edward and Bella and brought their love story to life. Unfortunately, and I hope I'm wrong, but I think David Slade being the dark director he is, does Eclipse an injustice by focusing on Victoria and Riley and the newborn army instead of the love between Edward and Bella and the conflict between Edward, Bella & Jacob. That is clearly apparent in the script.
I hope the editing of this movie proves me wrong.
I can only hope Stephanie has a hand in the editing of the movie and and steals back her characters making all those involved with the movie, staying true to what the saga is all about.
I haven't gotten past David Slade dissing Twilight before he was hired to direct Eclipse. His forced twitter apology to put the die-hard twilight fans at rest
did not impress me in the least.
With all that being said,
I wish I had taken the vow to remain Eclipse free.
I cannot believe I gave into curiosity, yet again.
Eclipse was my favorite of the three books.
My only wish was that Catherine Hardwick was the one to direct it. She captured Stephanie Meyers vision of Edward and Bella and brought their love story to life. Unfortunately, and I hope I'm wrong, but I think David Slade being the dark director he is, does Eclipse an injustice by focusing on Victoria and Riley and the newborn army instead of the love between Edward and Bella and the conflict between Edward, Bella & Jacob. That is clearly apparent in the script.
I hope the editing of this movie proves me wrong.
I can only hope Stephanie has a hand in the editing of the movie and and steals back her characters making all those involved with the movie, staying true to what the saga is all about.
I haven't gotten past David Slade dissing Twilight before he was hired to direct Eclipse. His forced twitter apology to put the die-hard twilight fans at rest
did not impress me in the least.
With all that being said,
I wish I had taken the vow to remain Eclipse free.
I cannot believe I gave into curiosity, yet again.
1 comments:
TINA STOP. DON'T DO IT.
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